Essay R is an attempt to describe the differences of professional wrestling from past to present. Although I'm sure his intentions were good, the finished piece probably didn't deserve a gold star, to say it nicely.
The author's purpose was clear in his thesis - to talk about how wrestling has evolved throughout the years, but it was extremely hard to concentrate and follow his work with the multitude of grammatical errors, choppy statements that didn't always fit together, and a very bland vocabulary.
I also felt as though he didn't take full advantage of his source. There were only three citings woven into the entire paper. Either he's a professional wrestling textbook, or he forgot to give credit where credit's due.
Overall, the goal was achieved weakly. He gave us his opinion and backed it up with a hand full of facts, but reading it was a struggle with all the problems listed above. If I had to pin a letter grade to this essay, it would probably be a C.
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You made many interesting points in your evaluation. I never thought about the fact that maybe the writer forgot to cite some of the sources. I agree that the writer barely achieved the goal of the paper, and that he should receive C.
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